SoL C8-13 Feedback — C. L. Charming

Song of Love Freed from Chains - Chapters 8 through 13- Beta Reader Feedback

Scene Considerations

How much did you enjoy this section of the novel?

1 = least enjoyable, 10 = most enjoyable

How interested/eager are you to continue reading?

1 = not at all interested, 10 = most interested/eager

If the number above is less than 10, why is it less than 10, and what do you think could make it a 10 for you?

What are your initial thoughts?

Favorite/least favorite parts, if any?

What emotion(s), if any, did you feel during the course of your read? Why?

Emotion word examples: interested, intrigued, curious, perplexed, angry, anxious, fearful, optimistic, pleased, outraged, annoyed, amused, surprised, bored, playful, comfortable, sympathetic, warm, irritated, suspicious, worried, etc.

What are your thoughts/feelings about the characters and character relationships in this segment of the novel?

Does Zayne's progress seem natural? Are his developing feelings for his master believable? How do you feel about his master? Memory jog for other characters: Sal, lady who rents them the room.

What are your thoughts/feelings about the scenes in this section of the novel?

You don't need to address every scene if you don't feel it's necessary. If you want to, that's wonderful. However, if you just want to focus on those that worked particularly well for you (or those that didn't), that's fine too. Here's a little memory jog of what happened: Zayne sees his master chopping wood, meets with Sal to discuss, Zayne proactively begins cleaning the whole house, Master eliminates a target/Zayne spends some time outside thinking, they fall into the pit, time in the pit/servicing his master sexually, escaping the pit, lady's house/beginning of bath scene.

How is the dialogue flowing?

Natural/Unnatural? Any favorite lines? Any that you disliked or thought were out of place?

What are your thoughts/feelings about the setting and world building?

Is there enough description for you throughout? Too much or too little anywhere?

Were there any sections that were slow, boring, unclear or confusing?

Yes

If yes, please explain.

Did you notice any plot holes or inconsistencies?

This can be anything from the minor (eg. someone's eye color changed) to a major flaw in the plot.

Yes

If yes, please describe.

Is there anything that was lacking or anything you want to mention that hasn’t already been mentioned above?

Yes

If yes, please elaborate.

Do you have any predictions?

Yes

If yes, what are they?

Name