Favorite/least favorite parts, if any? Why?
Emotion word examples: interested, intrigued, curious, perplexed, angry, anxious, fearful, optimistic, pleased, outraged, annoyed, amused, surprised, bored, playful, comfortable, sympathetic, warm, irritated, suspicious, worried, etc.
In particular, is Sal still (hopefully still?) likable even though he's miserable throughout a decent portion of this section of the novel? Memory jog for other characters/scenes: Sal cancelling on Herbie, the lesson with Pamina, the guys at cards, Sal's birthday with his family, discussions with Zayne, and running into Herbie with Fipo, the punching of the duke.
Natural/Unnatural? Any favorite lines or convos? Any that you disliked or thought were out of place?
Is there enough description throughout? Too much anywhere?